So - I got the idea when I looked at the post Monday, but I didn't get it finished until (literally) just now. I hope you like it. (And just FYI: "Chaim" - the Hebrew word for "life," is basically pronounced "HI-yum" - but combined into one syllable)
by Joanne Sher
Grazing near the hitching post behind The Belthlehem Inn, Chaim the donkey searched in vain for a water trough. People? Everywhere. Hay? Plenty. But water? Nowhere.
Chaim dropped to the ground and scratched his back against the brush. “So much better. Now where can I get a drink?”
Fumbling as he attempted to rise, the donkey spotted a small building off in the distance. “Looks like a stable.”
Chaim strode toward it, his tongue sticking to the roof of his mouth. He sped up as he heard rustling inside, but as he approached, his eyes widened. Human voices? A giggle?
Chaim's ears perked up. He knew those people. But why were they in the stable?
A high pitched wail rang through the stable walls, then ended. As Chaim walked in, he smiled at its source.
His former rider and her husband, standing over a water trough – and inside, a newborn baby wrapped in cloths. Chaim inspected the little one, rubbing up against him and sniffing his tiny fingers. The baby responded with a sigh, and his mother with a rub on Chaim's back. Chaim stuck his dry tongue out in the hopes of a few drops around the child in the trough. Again, nothing.
“You won't find any water here – just our precious baby.” Mary smiled and gazed down at the infant.
The donkey let out a dry cough. Joseph carried a small bucket and placed it under Chaim's nose. “For you, my donkey friend. I am afraid we have been busy since we left you.” He and Mary chuckled.
As he lapped up the water, he heard another strange sound.
“An angel told us to come here to see the Savior.”
Chaim gazed at the shepherds in awe. He had been carrying precious cargo.
Hope you enjoyed the story - be sure to stop by Susanna's post and see all the other amazing entries!
My heart is stirred by a noble theme as I recite my verses for the king; my tongue is the pen of a skillful writer. Psalm 45:1
Beautiful story! And I love it coming from the perspective of the donkey! Great job!ReplyDelete
If my kids read this, I may find a thimble of water by the donkey in my nativity! I loved this story.ReplyDelete
Thanks, Jen :) I hope I started a new tradition. ;)Delete
Lovely story, Joanne, and original POV. Well done!ReplyDelete
I absolutely pictured Chaim's fuzzy face taking it all in. Very cute story.ReplyDelete
Thanks so much, Wendy - it was fun to write :)Delete
Joanne, I love the pov of the donkey. Gives us a beautiful spin of a beloved story.ReplyDelete
Thanks so much, Tracey!Delete
Joanne, I love the nativity from the Donkey's perspective. Very nice.ReplyDelete
Thanks so much, Lauri :)Delete
What a lovely version of the Christmas story from the donkey's POV! Love it, Joanne! And of course he would be thirsty, and they would be busy :), but how nice that they remembered him when they could! Happy Holidays and thanks so much for joining in the contest fun!ReplyDelete
Thank YOU, Susanna, for the contest - and commenting, and the encouragement. It was a fun piece to write :)Delete
Precious. Would you mind if I used it for our Wednesday Friends and Heroes children's group at church. It's a special night and this would just add to it.ReplyDelete
Oh, Lollie - I would be absolutely honored! Thanks so much for asking - and for stopping by to comment :)Delete
Thank you, Joanne, for a fabulous narration from a very interesting perspective! We really liked it. Jane will read it to our children today. Happy holidays!ReplyDelete
With warm hugs,
Fred and Jane
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Thanks so much Fred :) I definitely enjoyed writing it - I hope your kids enjoy it!Delete
Oh, they just adore your story, Joanne! Jane had to read it at least three times for them:) They liked the Donkey so much! Thank you so much!Delete
Fred and Jane
SO very glad to hear it! Merry Christmas!Delete
Thank you! Merry Christmas to you and your family!Delete
Fred and Jane
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